IW: Kaloka of Brown Keneth ((21))

[bbg2010]

Character Profile
Name: Kaloka
Age: 21
Gender: female
Sexual Orientation: bi
Rank: rider
Weyr: Isle

Appearance: -see pic-

Picture:

Base Personality: happy until someone makes her mad. extremely lucky. loves everything.

History: she never knew her father and her mother kicked her out at 14 years old. two years later she found a mysterious egg that hatched into a mini dragon. a year later someone showed up and told her if she came with them she could have her own dragon so she went with them. a year later she impressed her brown dragon keneth. a day or two after the hatching keneth was acting very depressed. an earth doctor that was there to learn about dragons diagnosed keneth with disthymic disorder. the weyrwoman ordered that they go back to earth. the next day keneth and kaloka were transported to isle weyr. they have been there for the past two years.


Dragon Profile
Name: keneth
Color: brown
Color Code: #663507
Impressed on: may 2010
Age: 2

Physical Description: normal healthy brown. no markings.

Dragon Defect/Injury: disthymic disorder; he needs medication for it.

Base Personality: happy, confindent, and trustworthy


Firelizard Profile
Name: justin
Color: blue
Color Code: #69CCFA
Age: 4

Physical Description: normal healthy blue, scar over his left eye

Base Personality: enrgetic, self centered

[Wolfy]

You really need to work on your history. Add details, like where she came from, why she was kicked out by her parents, where she went after that. How did she find the egg, which weyr did she weyr did she go to on Pern, explain what his disorder is exactly. Details are needed in this weyr, as it is a semi-literate site. Look at some of the histories from some accepted characters for examples.