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Post by bbg2010 on May 20, 2012 15:16:49 GMT -5
Character ProfileName: Kaloka Age: 21 Gender: female Sexual Orientation: bi Rank: rider Weyr: Isle Appearance: -see pic- Picture: Base Personality: happy until someone makes her mad. extremely lucky. loves everything. History: she never knew her father and her mother kicked her out at 14 years old. two years later she found a mysterious egg that hatched into a mini dragon. a year later someone showed up and told her if she came with them she could have her own dragon so she went with them. a year later she impressed her brown dragon keneth. a day or two after the hatching keneth was acting very depressed. an earth doctor that was there to learn about dragons diagnosed keneth with disthymic disorder. the weyrwoman ordered that they go back to earth. the next day keneth and kaloka were transported to isle weyr. they have been there for the past two years. Dragon ProfileName: keneth Color: brown Color Code: #663507 Impressed on: may 2010 Age: 2 Physical Description: normal healthy brown. no markings. Dragon Defect/Injury: disthymic disorder; he needs medication for it. Base Personality: happy, confindent, and trustworthy Firelizard ProfileName: justin Color: blue Color Code: #69CCFA Age: 4 Physical Description: normal healthy blue, scar over his left eye Base Personality: enrgetic, self centered
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Post by Wolfy on May 20, 2012 20:31:11 GMT -5
You really need to work on your history. Add details, like where she came from, why she was kicked out by her parents, where she went after that. How did she find the egg, which weyr did she weyr did she go to on Pern, explain what his disorder is exactly. Details are needed in this weyr, as it is a semi-literate site. Look at some of the histories from some accepted characters for examples.
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